The Official Writing Challenge
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05/02/14
A strong message and an excellent verse to close out your well written entry!

Good job!

God bless~
05/04/14
Good perspective for sure - and I agree, that last verse is a great way to end this piece.
05/05/14
You didn't just encourage folks to choose digital detox for a while but you gave them steps in how it could be done giving them hope that they can do what seems impossible. Well done.
This is a a great devotion. You grabbed my attention and I could relate right out of the box. You did a nice job of matching the Scriptures used with your message.

Add some double spaces between paragraphs to make it easier to read. Also consider using contractions like "What's that noise?" to make it sound more natural.

You nailed the topic and did so in a way that was entertaining and helpful. You have a knack for devotions. Personally I like prayers with them because not everyone knows how to pray, but I think you should seriously consider submitting some to FL daily devotions. Congratulations on ranking 8th in your level. The highest rankings can be found on the message boards.