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This is such a cute story. I was glad to read Nancy made the better choice. In my opinion, it was a very real depiction of how frustrated young girls can be and how they are searching for that unconditional love that only God can give. I could sense Nancy wanted something better and wanted to believe. Glad she asked...and received. Jessie was bold! I think there is surely a lesson to learn from him.
This is a powerful story. It shows how easy it is to wander down the wrong path. My heart was pounding when she drank from the glass. I wanted to scream at the MC and warn her about the possibility of a date rape drug in that glass. You did a nice e job of pacing the story while delivering a powerful message. Good job.
This really kept my interest throughout the entire piece. Loved the ending!

God bless~
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