The Official Writing Challenge
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This is such a sweet story. Thank you for sharing it. I can sense your heart was all in it. It was nice to read your expression of gratitude and faith and it certainly made me smile. I also enjoyed the simplicity of it...I didn't have to think hard. Keep writing!
This is a sweet story that I am sure your family will treasure for years to come. Be careful of little errors like their instead of there and when you have a new speaker, make sure you start a new paragraph. You did a nice job of allowing the reader a glimpse into the MC's heart. God does have a wonderful way of working things out just so. Good job.
06/09/13
This is an interesting story, and I like the way you bring in the mishaps of every day life- flat tires and back problems - which seem to come up at such crisis times.

I think the two "hads" in the beginning of the third paragraph are a bit awkward, but I understand that you were pointing at past happenings.

All in all, I think this is a good entry. I could feel the excitement and love that centered around this baby, and I love that.
06/09/13
A sweet story that will be treasured by all parties concerned. I loved it. Nicely done.

God bless~
I came across this again and noticed the comment about the two had and you could fix it by replacing the passive had for something like: We had thrown a shower...I still think you did a great job with this piece and have no doubt God will use it to glorify his name in ways you might never envision. :)