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Topic: Water (04/26/04)

TITLE: The Glass
By george elerick
04/27/04

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They passed by him everday. Whether it was on the way to work or a soccer game, they somehow forgot that he was standing there. They just couldn't seem to hear his silent screams echo throughout the old yellow cracked walls. They had lived there for years and he had screamed so many times that there were days he even lost his voice and hope along with it.

You see they placed him in the window for all the world to see, but those who placed him there were the first to forget. They loved him in the beginning, they were passionate about drinking him in and using him whenever they needed and he didn't mind being used because that's what he was there for.

It was such a hot summer day that even the birds couldn't sing because their throats were so very dry. They all rushed in for water, but instead of the glass being full of water, it was completely empty. For they left him for all the world to see and for the sun to dry its content. They all were starving for water, but he was no where in sight. He had left them because, they neglected him. This family is now no longer with us.

THEME: We as Christians tend to take the "Living Water" that is Jesus Christ for granted. We have this great excitement in the beginning that seems to get covered by apathy and the world around us. It is when it will be too late that we want to run to Christ, who is and should be our survival. I am speaking of us who call Christ Lord and yet do not believe with our hearts, this is blasphemy, and the only losers will be us. We must take this relationship with Christ very seriously, he is our breathe, our life, our water. Drink up!!


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Leticia Caroccio05/03/04
Isn't it funny that no matter how thirsty we get, we dry different drinks instead of the tall frosty glass of water that is our Lord. You did a great job with this topic. You didn't have to write, THEME. Your words were clear and to the point. Good job.
Dave Wagner05/03/04
It's a bit too vague throughout the piece. "They, him, etc." without defining who you are refering to. Also, at the end you turn the heat up a few notches (...this is blasphemy...) and scold us, then finish with "Drink up!", which completely diffuses the situation. So they progression goes: vague (though strangely compelling), then a slap, then a nuetralizing of the sting before it even starts.

You have the makings of a good submission here, in my opinion, but it needs an overhaul. I appreciate the effort.
Sara Westhead05/05/04
The beginning was well written, but very vague. It leaves the reader confused about what exactly you are talking about, and who this stranger standing behind a window screaming is.

A re-write, expanding on some of these issues, and then a transition into your lesson is needed.

Good try, though!
L.M. Lee05/06/04
thanks for the reminder that we all need to be continually filled with Christ's presence.
B Price05/06/04
wasn't sure of the story at first, and it was a little confusing, but I did like how you ended it and agree we are dry without JESUS