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Topic: Pride (04/12/04)

TITLE: THE FABLED RIDGE
By george elerick
04/15/04

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David was a very peculiar man. He lived on the outskirts of an old mining town near Schuyler's Ridge. Not much was known about him except that he didn't get out much and he always had a limp everytime he walked. He would take long walks along the ridge at night and talk with God. They were good friends, he would tell God his worries and cares and God would just sit and listen.
The night was soothing for David because he found peace in the unknown, he found rest in the unseen, for he knew he was never alone. Those in the local church knew about David and knew he was a believer, but their fear kept them from ever making a trip to that ridge. They were scared of the what they didn't know. They trembled from all the fables that had been made about this lonely bachelor. The fables were true enough to keep the whole town away from David.
The cool air brushed through his hair like a wildfire. The smell of lilies were in the mountain air, and tonight was unlike any other night before. David was strolling along the ridge as he always did. The cold night air grew into a swell of tempestous wind and at a glance, suddenly, the bachelor lost his footing and he quickly found himself dangling on the side of Schuyler's Ridge. He screamed for help, but all he got back was his own echo. In the nestled woods, there were two fisherman who heard the cries, but didn't make any effort to run to the call. For they knew who it was and they because of their pride and fear did not want to help their once brother-in-law. They blamed him for Margaret's death. "Only if Dave would have sent her to the hospital." They both mumbled in succession, maybe he wouldn't be where he is right now.
The screams were silenced by the loud 'thud' of a body hitting the ground. David died that night because of the pride of two men.

THEME:
When we let pride rule our ego we 'kill' those that need the arm outstretched. We don't fix the relationships God calls us to fix... and in doing so we let pride win the day


Member Comments
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Leticia Caroccio04/19/04
What a sad story. I was humbled as I read it. The Good Samaritan was a great example of humility and what can happen when we do not have pride in our hearts. Good story.
Mary C Legg04/19/04
unfortunately it happens all too often that people become insensititve to needs of others or they listen to gossips and harden their hearts against those in need.
Jan Grupido04/19/04
I felt like the wind was knocked out of me...an unexpected piece. It was, however, captivating...one of the reason I enjoy reading challenge pieces. thank you!
L.M. Lee04/20/04
how very tragic. We never realize how cruel we can be.
B Price04/21/04
saddness, but it spoke what could happen if allow pride to get in the way. These brothers now done the same as they felt like their brother in law did do thier sister.
Two wrongs never makes a right.
May many learn from your story.