The Official Writing Challenge
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05/22/17
An interesting read and on topic. Good job.

I am sure it was difficult for many who didn't know who, where and what some of the story's aci-fi elements were without a previous explanation.

It slowed down the read for me just jumping into the middle of this unfamiliar territory.

It was a fun read though. God bless.
05/24/17
Enjoyable read although a little slow without the proper background.

There was a bit that jumped backwards in time and then was brought back to the present. A little confusing. At least I had to read it a little more slowly to catch what your meaning was.

I liked the comparison that she thought it to be a dull day and it turned out to be anything but. Good job!