The Official Writing Challenge
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Very readable. Elie's voice was very convincing. One small thing - "I prayed to God, Mommy" should have started with open quotes.
Very sweet and touching. How God uses children to heal is amazing. The parts about the pennies were priceless. Very enjoyable and moving entry.
In reading this, once could sense the child's innocence and eagerness. Also, the love of the mom and her heart's desire to see her precious child grow.
I am wondering about the interchanging of the word Special and Especial. Was that meant to be? Great story!
11/16/09
This is such a special story. The voices are pure, and the imagery and atmosphere are very real. I love this!
Beautifully written. I could so feel the mother's hope to raise her child and the precious spirit of the child.
11/20/09
This is my kind of story, Carole. Real life, you are there, not just in the story but in the hearts of the characters. It is so beautifully tender, you moved me to tears.
11/20/09
What a tender, love story! For that is what it truly is! Thank you for sharing this with us! Great job!