The Official Writing Challenge
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This was good--written with knowledge of what it's like to be a teen-age girl. Your message of abstinence was well done also. Excellent job!
06/16/07
The point you make in your story about finding friends who believe in the One who can change people is so awesome! That's a gem of a sentence. It's difficult for people who haven't met that One to accept that change can happen; and once it happens, peace can come to live in the troubled heart.
06/16/07
Very well written indeed – both the descriptive parts and the dialogue. Your opening two paragraphs simply dripped with passion!
One small criticism would be that I found it distracting the way you used a selection of italics, apostrophes and quotation marks to highlight certain words or phrases. I suspect that the piece would have flowed better if you stuck to one method.