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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 2 – Intermediate)
Topic: Happy (07/12/07)

TITLE: Unspoken Prayer
By Seema Bagai
07/18/07


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“Two to three months,” the doctor had declared. The words lingered in the chilly, antiseptic air of the dim hospital room.

Anna and Marie stood at the foot of the bed; their expressions frozen in a mixture of bewilderment, anger, and sadness. The sisters struggled to absorb the details the doctor had shared earlier and keep their emotions contained. Their father was in the hospital for the third time. Now they had been told there would be no more hospital stays. Nothing more could be done. The cancer was growing faster than it could be treated.

“Mom should come see him,” Anna whispered.

Their mother was in the waiting room. Their parents had not seen each other in three years. The unpleasantness of their divorce had created a fortress between them. Even after these two months of surgery, radiation, chemotherapy, and emergency room visits, they remained apart. Anna and Marie had encouraged their mother to visit. Even today, after being told the doctor’s prognosis, she still voiced her reluctance.

“You know she won’t. She said she wouldn’t, unless he asks to see her. We know that’s not going to happen.”

“Ask him. Let’s see what he says.”

Marie gently shook her father’s shoulder and his eyes opened. “Dad, do you want to see Mom? She’s here. She’s in the waiting room.”

His eyes widened for a second and then he said, “Yes.” It was the first word he had spoken all day and it surprised both women. They didn’t think he could still speak and didn’t know he wanted to see her.

“I’ll go get her.” Anna strode toward the waiting room, her heart racing. She glanced up at the fluorescent light panels, unable to form her prayer into words. Since her parents’ divorce, Anna had not prayed for her parents to reunite. Instead, hope dwelled silently in a remote corner of her heart.

“Mom, you need to come and see Dad. Marie asked and he said yes.”

Tears welled up in her mother’s exhausted eyes. “Are you sure I should? What if he gets upset at me?”

“We’ve told you before. He won’t get mad at you. He can barely talk. And he’s different now. Come on. You need to see him now while he’s still alert and can recognize people.” Anna grasped her mother’s hand, gently pulled her out of the chair, and led her down the quiet corridor.

They entered the room. Marie stopped what she was saying and moved away from the side of the bed, making room for her mother, who inched forward. The sisters watched as their parents’ eyes met.

In seconds, the fortress crumbled. Their faces became a slide show of surprise, concern, remorse, and joy. They clutched hands, as tears cascaded down their weary faces. He kissed her hand several times and she touched his nearly bald head. He struggled to speak, but couldn’t form the words.

“Don’t worry. I’m here,” she said. What seemed unthinkable, even hours ago, had become reality. With one person entering a hospital room, a family became reunited.

Anna closed her moist eyes for a moment. Lord, thank you for answering the prayer I didn’t even pray.


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Joy Faire Stewart07/19/07
Isn't it wonderful He knows our needs before we even pray. Very touching story and well written.
Joanne Sher 07/21/07
This brought tears to my eyes. So poignant. You have a wonderful way of capturing a scene. Aren't you so glad that God is all-knowing? Wonderful message, and your last line is just perfect.
Dee Yoder 07/21/07
This is a warm, loving story. The redemption at the end of their broken family is very touching. It reminds me that with God, all things are possible!
Edy T Johnson 07/22/07
This is not only polished writing, but you grab and hold your reader and reach into the heart and pull up the tears. I wouldn't change a thing. Excellent.
Jeanette Oestermyer 07/23/07
What a great story, and told so well. The Bible does say the Lord knows what we want or need before we ask Him. I imagine this hit home for lots of people.
Sharlyn Guthrie 07/23/07
Wonderful writing! I enjoyed this story very much.
Lynda Schultz 07/24/07
Lovely story, and a great reminder of the Holy Spirit who puts words to the prayers that we can't form.
Kevin Rodgers07/25/07
This is really good! God's plans are perfect...he knows just what we need and want, and just when to answer our prayers...even the one's we never pray! This is one of my favorites this week! Well done!
Patty Wysong07/25/07
Great story! Very well written and the message of hope is terrific. Knowing it comes from your life makes it soooo good, too! Wonderful.
Verna Cole Mitchell 07/25/07
I love the message her and the wonderful way you presented it in your story.
Sherrie Jackson07/25/07
When I'm reading a really top-notch story, I forget I'm even reading. Might sound weird, but you did everything so right - pacing, descriptions, prose - that I was able to experience the story on a level deeper than just taking in information. I love it when that happens! :) Excellent job this week, and good luck!
LaNaye Perkins07/25/07
You did a great job writing this story. It was beautiful!
Sara Harricharan 07/25/07
Happy tears. What a great way to end a great story! I'm glad the 'couple' finally got together in the end. Your title is great too! ^_^
Sheri Gordon07/25/07
This is very well written. Very gripping. I felt every emotion along the way. Thanks for sharing this. Nice job.
Kristen Hester 07/25/07
This story is so touching. It is very well written and so real. Thank you for sharing this tender moment. I was blessed by your words.
Dixie Phillips 07/25/07
OH MY GOODNESS!! This was one of my favorites for this challenge. I guess being the daughter of divorced parents... I could relate to the ENTIRE saga. Good to the last drop.
David Butler 07/25/07
Once again, this shows how the extremes of life (and death) can make us take a reality check, and we get a proper perspective on life. You illustrated that so well.
Relationships is what it's all about. A pity it often takes a tragedy to heal the real tragedies in our hearts. We need to hear your message more often. God bless your writing.
Verna Cole Mitchell 07/26/07
Congratulations on being "Highly commended"--turly well deserved.
Sara Harricharan 07/26/07
Congratulations on your highly commended! ^_^ Way to write!
Mo 07/26/07
Wow. Congrats on your Highly Commended (& top 40 finish)!


   
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