The Official Writing Challenge
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11/03/06
I think you were writing a few different stories here. I read the first part about you choosing teaching as a career and then it jumped to another and then the final apart about being a teacher to your children. From a reader's standpoint only, you would keep my attention more if you picked one main idea and expanded on it. MAybe say less how you studied all those courses and focus on the disappointment when you entered the school system or how one teaches their children.
just making a few suggestions for content - because I think you have the mechanics down- just need to increase the interest for your reader:) Hope this helps for your next one!
11/04/06
good piece
I enjoyed this article very much. I especially liked the comment about the Holy Spirit teaching. I've found it to be true in my own life.