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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Purposefulness (Purpose in Life) (05/25/06)
Bill flopped dejectedly into the chair, and let out a long sigh. Why, kept going through his mind. All his friends had exciting careers, wives, some even had children already. But alas he was at home, helping his father with a business with no wife whatsoever. Why, his mind screamed again, I would make a great father and husband I probably would make a great entrepreneur too, so what is my purpose in life? Bill stared outside not seeing anything, when a soft gentle breeze blew through the open window, seeming to bring with it his answer. His purpose was for now to prepare to be a good husband and father. To help his dad with the business so one day he could successfully run his own, and to be loving and kind to his mom and siblings. Most importantly his number one purpose in life was to follow God with his whole heart and mind, and to make sure that his life conformed to the will of God the Father. For there is no better thing in life then to find your purpose in serving God and others.
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Rita Garcia
06/02/06
Brief, but to the point.
"For there is no better thing in life then to find your purpose in serving God and others." AMEN!
Sherril Wendling
06/04/06
Off to a good start! Your style here is clear and expressive. The problem is...I like Bill! Don't you think we readers deserve to know him a bit better?

There's nothing wrong with brevity, as long as it's fully developed. Here we are left hungering for more of your gift, more of your story. I vote you go back and give us all 21 guns hiding in your writer's soul. You've got the goods; go for it!

Looking forward to more from you! Blessings, Sherry~

Shari Armstrong 
06/04/06
A nice start, expand on this, maybe add some more examples of "show don't tell" and this would be even better :)
Marilyn Schnepp 
06/04/06
Alot of Wisdom in a few words! My only suggestion would be to put a "question mark" after the "Why?" and to break it down into paragraphs. Otherwise, I loved it - it had a clear message, and hit the nail on the head, topic-wise! Well done.