The Official Writing Challenge
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Priceless! Sheer delight - a joy to read.
04/22/13
Cute and fun - and the dialogue is so realistic. Enjoyed this so much!
This was a delightful tale of a family and the way they interact. I found it charming and smiled throughout. I did wonder if you were going to be on topic, but you did pull it in at the last minute. While the topic wasn't the focal point of the story, you still did a nice job of keeping me focused and invested in the story from beginning to end. The dialog felt natural and you did a nice job of setting the scene.
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