The Official Writing Challenge
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I can identify with the main character's lonliness as a child. Great story. I really like the description of how the finger that wrote the 10 commandments also wrote on your heart! I could actually see this happening!
11/23/09
This is simply lovely:

"I asked Him if He loved me, seemed no one else did. He took the finger He carved the Ten Commandments with and wrote a note on my heart. He told me He loved me so much it was as if I was His favorite. And He wore my smile around His neck. He said I had a cheerful, yellow, soft heart."

That is a beautiful description of God's love for each one of us! He loves us as individuals. You described it in a PERFECT way. I love that sentence about wearing our smiles around His neck--ah, so lovely!