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TITLE: The Forgotten People
By Ken Ebright
11/13/07
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tell me ho I could of written this better. Iam also looking for grammer tips espically commas
Scene 1
It was a very cold night, it was one of those nights where you needed every part of you body covered, a basic pare of gloves would not keep you hands warm tonight.. This would be a very hard night for Steve, because he would be spending the night under the Mississippi river bridge, with just a few wool blankets.Most people in this city would be sleeping in warm beds tonight. Steve and others like him are forgotten.
Scene 2
SSSSSSSSS sizzled the bacon, bshshshsh went the scrambled eggs when they landed in the pan. The cooks at Friendship village (a retirement home) had been up since 5 am preparing breakfast, on this snowy Christmas day. There would be a few less meals to prepare today, 80 percent of the residents had relatives to spend Christmas with today. Dorothy, would be alone today, her family didn't care. She and others are forgotten.The last two scenes depict, people in this world that are forgotten. These people need Jesus too.Most churches today tend to concentrate there evangelism efforts on there co-workers, or friends, or sending people to Africa.On the other extreme, there is a well know author that has wrote sermon series on serving community. This series centers around serving the community. That is good, but it is sad that we need to dedicate valuable preaching time to this topic. It should be natural part of our Christian walk to serve people.

This is a lost, and a dying world. Instead of watching football on Sunday, how about serving the forgotten. For I was hungry and you gave me something to eat, I was thirsty and you gave me something to drink, I was a stranger and you invited me in, I needed clothes and you clothed me, I was sick and you looked after me, I was in prison and you came to visit me. Matthew 25:35-36 The homeless and the elderly in rest homes need Jesus. Do you hear there cry?
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