Amy, I can't believe that I didn't comment on this poem earlier! The phone must have rung or something! LOL! This is one of my all time favorite poems. You have written with such skill and beauty using images that carry me away as I read. Absolutely wonderful! What a treasure this poem is!! Thank you for creating it.
Beautiful and stable with the continuous a,b,a,b rhythm and 8 syllable lines (although I did find 9 syllables in (counting spaces) lines 14 & 28). Thank you for sharing your work. May the Lord bless and keep you. My He shine His face upon you and give you peace. Best wishes.
*sigh* As I read, my computer screen faded away and instead I was sitting on a front porch in a rocking chair with a glass of lemonade enjoying the view of "evening coming of age." How beautiful. Please keep writing! God has given you a marvelous gift! Pure enjoyment! Thank you!