The Official Writing Challenge
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09/15/25
Interesting take on the topic. I was definitely rooting for the baby goats and relieved when they were saved.
09/15/25
I liked this fable! I think you meant "malice" not "malic".
This is a great story. The conflicts pulled me in right away and I found myself holding my breath in suspense. I noted a subtle POV shift when you went from the fox's thoughts (You can put thoughts in italics to show reader they are thoughts.) to the mother goat catching a whiff. It's super subtle, but an easy way to fix it would be to see that line from the fox's eyes--maybe she freezes when she sees goat sniffing or hears the rustle of her nose before the snorts. Another shift was when you hopped into the dog's head too. Most people probably wouldn't catch them, but keeping it all from the fox's POV will paint more of a picture. You did a brilliant job of making all three prompts essential to the storyline, not just a mere mention of the words. I really enjoyed the verses you put with it too. You have a great message in this suspense-filled tale.
09/17/25
I am happy the Fox did not get the goats, but I felt sorry for her hungry kits.