The Official Writing Challenge
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08/31/25
You bring the prodigal son to life.
This is such a powerful piece. You did an excellent job of painting a picture with your words. I could feel the MC's pain. My only thought was the incomplete sentences near the middle. It took my tired brain a second to realize he was comparing what he had with what he has and they were likely his thoughtd. If you put thoughts into italics that's a great way to let the reader see into the MC's head and thoughts do come in rushes--fast, incomplete sentences, slang, etc. You do a really nice job of doing that. The pacing was spot on. And you did a great job of writing on topic and delivering a Christian
message.

On Monday, on the message boards and the FW Facebook group, there will be a prompt to Drop a Hint about this week's entries. If you're looking for more feedback, consider going to FWFB or the forums and leave a hint about your title. But make sure you wait until you see my prompt on Monday.
09/04/25
I look forward to reading your stories each week! You write with a lyrical quality and this week is no exception. Congratulations on your 2nd place finish!
Congratulations on your EC. Happy Dance!