The Official Writing Challenge
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Your story reminds me of how Jesus "cleans us up" when our sins soil our hearts and souls, and how He patiently makes us presentable to the LORD. Izzy is also an fine example of innocence, love and kindness
I love this story!
Blessings
09/13/24
This made me smile! Reminded me of a true ‘visit to a barn before church’ story.
This is a delightful story. I can't tell you how many times you made me smile. Your dialog was spot on and the descriptions perfect. The only thing I noted is make sure you only capitalize Mother or Father when being used as a name. (Her mother laughed. She loved seeing Father smile.) I think the only reason this didn't rank higher was because it might've been seen a tad weaker on topic, but I absolutely loved this. Congratulations on ranking 6th overall. And it's really nice to see you writing again.
Congratulations!