The Official Writing Challenge
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What a delightful story. I could easily see this in a comic book or anime story. I thought the take on the topic was really fun and fresh. Adding more details could make it even more powerful. I didn't know what their super powers were at first. You could introduce that in the opening by showing the character sweating and complaining about the warm room. The dialog could be a bit more authentic. Kids speak in incomplete sentences, use slang, and whine a bit too. Although I think you did an awesome job with your limited word count. This definitely could be a longer story and if you ever want help editing a longer piece, I'd be happy to help. I enjoy your characters, the fun genre, and the important message.
12/09/22
you had some really long sentences. It was an action packed adventure.
Congratulations, my beloved, on your first first place EC! Your creativity and humor always make me smile.