The Official Writing Challenge
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09/16/22
I loved every minute reading this. I felt I was there in the flight with you, feeling safe.
Wow. I usually see surprise endings and I didn't spot it at all. I love an awesome, thought-provoking, ending and this one is tops in my book. It's a timely reminder with a very profound message.
I did notice that you have welcomes constructive critiques so I thought I'd add something tiny that some might not like. It doesn't bother me, but I have seen publishers and editors comment about writing in the first person when that person dies in the end, because they can't tell their story. I again am okay with that, but if you ever decided to publish this somewhere perhaps you could switch it to third person or maybe have it found in a diary entry or something. But I still think it's brilliant nonetheless!
09/21/22
I never saw the end coming. But neither did the plane's passengers and crew, as they were suddenly and callously subverted into instruments of death in a barbaric personification of evil.
09/21/22
Wow, well done!
God Bless~
Powerful story--excellent writing.
Congratulations on your EC! Happy Dance! It was one of my favorites this week!
09/22/22
Congrats!
God BLess~