The Official Writing Challenge
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The imagery took my breath away. What a masterful use of words! (IMHO, the last paragraph was not needed.)
This is a powerful piece. You do an excellent job of painting a brilliant picture. Be careful to stay consistent with tense. (You started in past and switched to present.) I think this is a unique and touching retelling of the familiar parable and the last line knocked it out of the park.
This is great writing. The imagery at the beginning seemed to stall the real story. But I was mesmerized by the flow and rhythm. For me, the last paragraph was not needed.
Very good imagery, but maybe a little too much before getting to actual story.
Well done. I loved this line: “The Law, the law, the law” like the caw, caw, caw of a crow.
A lot of vivid imagery!
Loved the imagery in this this. Beautiful piece. Hope it places high.