The Official Writing Challenge
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A wonderful telling of rescue and redemption. Thank you.
09/05/19
Cleaning up the punctuation would help the reader over the punctuation bumps that distract from the flow of your important story.
Fascinating story! You were great with the imagery and vivid story telling. I hope this places high!
This is a powerful story. It tugged on my heart, especially since I know something like this might be happening right now. You did a great job of developing the character and delivering a powerful message.
09/10/19
Powerfully written, and right on topic. Well done,
Blessings~
09/10/19
Wow! The imagery is fantastic. The break in time was a bit jarring. I don't think the first part was necessary. You could have had Mahommed could have related his memories of that day.
This is unique and very interesting.
09/10/19
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Wow! The imagery is fantastic.
The break in time was a bit jarring. I don't think the first part was necessary. The adult Mahommed could have related his memories of that day when he was a boy.
This is unique and very interesting.
09/12/19
Congrats on your EC!