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This story makes my blood boil. So sad when a dead beat dad so foolishly neglects his children. My heart goes out to you and your son. God Bless
I like the dialog, and I could picture this young boy waiting. I could kick Stuart in the teeth. A sad story well told.
Oh, you made me tear up. You did an awesome job sharing this moment in time. So very sad. You absolutely nailed the ending.
Well done! I hope the mother stops telling the boy when the father might show up.
Aw my heart lurched at this entry. I've two friends who lived this kind of is heart breaking.

Great writing.

God bless~
Great title, and a touching story told so credibly, with solid characterisation. Should be a winner.
Ahh this broke my heart mainly because I know this is reality for so many kids. I loved how Mom was supportive, honest, but didn't bash Dad. That can be a rare thing especially when you know your kid is hurting so. You did a fantastic job of developing the characters, nailing the topic in a relatable way, and sending a strong Christian message.
You did a nice job of drawing a crystal clear picture. One that should be sent to many a selfish father. Very sad.
Yeah. I wanted to punch Stuart in the face. Loser.