The Official Writing Challenge
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11/10/17
Well done,
Blessings~
11/11/17
I was hoping the ending would have a different twist because I predicted that it was an angel after they met. However, I did feel a connection with the MC.

Suggestion:

...that should quite [quiet] the bum.

The MC had a strong personality, he was well written. For some red ink - the last line was a little weak.
I enjoyed the rest of the story and would have loved to have a better resolution.
Congratulations on ranking 19 overall. Happy Dance!