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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 4 – Masters)
Topic: Friend (11/02/17)
Listen, Sal: I really appreciate everything you’re doing for me, but I just think we’d better cool it for a while.

Believe me, I know you’ve always got my back and I really appreciate it. I just think we’d better stop talking in the halls. I think Mrs. Mulligan saw me talking to you, and she gave me a really funny look. I wish I could've have told her, “Hey, Mrs. Mulligan. I’m not crazy; I just have a friend you can’t see.”

Yeah, that would've gone over well.

I don’t want to think about what my life was like; before you started taking care of me. Ever since Mom went to heaven, Dad hasn’t had much time to do the laundry or make sure me and Daisy get new clothes or shoes. The mean kids at our school made fun of me, and I got beat up every day after school. My school lunches were grabbed before I even got a taste of them. When I said I’d tell a teacher or the principal, they told me if I said anything to anyone about it, they’d come after Daisy – and I’d rather be beaten up and hungry than to have her hurt.

It seems like I'd known about you all my life. My Mom used to talk about you before she died, and one day I guess I just figured I had nothing to lose. So, I asked you to be my friend and my helper. When you came into my life, you totally helped me, Sal. When I’m with you, I feel comforted and safe – even when they’re beating on me.

I don’t know how you do it, Sal – but it’s almost as if you take the punches and slaps and mean words for me. The pain I used to feel… well, I don’t know how, but even though the beatings haven’t stopped, I don’t feel the pain as much.

My life is just better with you in it – and don’t think I don’t know it. All the people and things that used to make me crazy are easier to deal with because I can talk to you about them. So, yeah: I do want to keep talking to you, but I can’t let anyone see us talking. I just can’t have anybody thinking I’m crazy or something.

I’m just worried they’d call Dad – and he has enough to worry about. I hear him crying sometimes, after he thinks I’m asleep – so I don’t want to give him something else to worry about.
So, anyway, Sal or Salvatore, (to call you by your whole Name)–try to understand. You’re the best friend I've ever had. I’ll never stop being grateful to you, but let’s save our conversations for when we are alone.

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The name Salvatore means “Savior.”
“God is our refuge and strength, an ever-present help in trouble.” Psalm 46:1
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Hannah Gaudette
11/10/17
A bittersweet story with a beautiful message. Well done and thank you!
C D Swanson 
11/10/17
Well done
Blessings~
Bonnie Bowden 
11/10/17
Touching story about the relationship between the MC and Salvatore.

Was the main character male or female?

Sometimes, I noticed you slipped between present and past tense.
Rebecca Bithyah
11/13/17
I enjoyed reading about a child's relationship with God. Using "Sal" kept my interest until the end, as I suspected, but wasn't sure that the MC was talking about God.
For some red ink - I'm not sure that the colons you use are appropriate. I think commas would work better.
Thanks for the read.