The Official Writing Challenge
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03/17/17
Unfortunately too many kids find themselves in this situation. Your story felt real and gave me a heartfelt glimpse into their struggles and challenges.

I do think telling the story from a third person perspective made me feel like an outsider looking in, whereas writing from Nicki's perspective in first person would have made me feel more like a trusted friend or family member and pulled me into their world.

Good story with a lot of heart.
03/21/17
I enjoyed the story and how your title applied to both the MC and her mother. Well written.
Your story is well told of this child with responsibility thrust upon her. Her caring heart for sibling was made obvious by her actions.
03/23/17
You've captured Nicki's mindset and existence so well. A well-deserved HC. Congratulations Ellen
05/10/17
Unfortunately some childhood recollections are bitter when they should be sweet.