The Official Writing Challenge
This article has been read 496 times
Member Comments
Member
Date
06/10/16
Beautiful double layered vision of a mother offering her child comfort, as Jesus comforts both of them! I enjoyed the read and the peaceful feeling it emitted! Great message, well written!
06/13/16
Nicely done.
This is lovely. You did a wonderful job of infusing the topic in every part of your story. I could totally relate to the mom in the tub and having the best bath ever interrupted.

My red ink is tiny. When you combine words to make a single adjective, use hyphens like four-year-old daughter. On the bright side, the hyphenated words count as one word, lowering your word count. :)

Your message was divine and one God has been telling me this week. I also liked that you included the prayer. Many people don't know how to pray. That was a perfect ending.