The Official Writing Challenge
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05/18/15
Hehehe This is cute!

I think you're a bit weak on topic. The topic specifically says "to God," and while there was surrender, I didn't see much about surrendering to God specifically.

I LOVED the line about your arms falling off and then running away on their own accord.
05/19/15
Arghhhh! That's sounds like a nightmare. Good use of the inner voice.