The Official Writing Challenge
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I loved your characters. Though there have been several similar stories, your MC's POV made yours fresh and interesting. The only red ink I have is I think you meant fazes not phases. Your piece made me smile and left me with a warm happy feeling. I thoroughly enjoyed it.
02/20/15
Smiling here! Loved it!

God bless~
Congratulations on ranking 11th overall! Happy Dance!