The Official Writing Challenge
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Great choice of Bible story for this topic. Nicely done.
I was 'sloth' to draw on humour to comment, but there I go again.
You have captured the essence of the parable very clearly - ironically by presenting a side-story (a parallelable??)
I'm sure that Jesus' choice of words would have been more graphic than the poetic style
of the KJV, so I reckon you have done very well.
Very imaginative and unique take on the topic! So well done! Enjoyed!
Loved your take on the story. Well done!
you nailed it! This was a great story to use with an interesting approach :-) this is a great piece good work
Very well done! I particularly liked the gentle sarcasm. Not too heavy, but still pointed.
I have never considered laziness to be the reason two "upstanding" citizens passed him by. Outstanding entry - your writing is eloquent, and the POV is intriguing and original.
Oh, I like this.

My only "red ink," and it's slight, is that I doubt "to walk by on the other side" would have already become a phrase by the time he wrote this open letter. Perhaps you could have poked even a little more fun at them, and suggested it, though. "All is not lost, however. Perhaps you will forever be remembered with a catch phrase that depicts your indolence."

I love the "open letter" idea. Creative!

I really like the fresh perspective on the Bible story. Made me think!
Congratulations on ranking 25 overall! Happy Dance!