The Official Writing Challenge
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03/08/14
I've always wanted to know the names of the Rabbi's outerwear. Thanks for sharing that information.

Opinion: Titles attract readers, and the more creative the better. Consider including more action in your story. Show how the boy responded to the shofar that sounded right after the mention of Jesus return. Did he jump back in surprise? Did his eyes widen in wonder? You might also consider connecting the following sentence to show the impact of the awe-filled moment:
"I turned to retrace the labyrinthine paths, but this time my path seemed different."

I love stories about the place where Jesus ministered and where He will return someday.
03/10/14
This is absolutely beautiful - and accurate in its language (and I can say that :D). Love the descriptions and the boy and the message. The end is perfect, too. Thank you!
03/11/14
Well done! Excellent writing here.

God bless~