The Official Writing Challenge
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Hahahahaha I loved the last line. It made the entire piece in one sentence! Great job with this clever entry. Thank you.

God bless~
This was an enjoyable read, especially because it's true. How fun to indulge in another culture's dining pleasures--except when it causes gut pain. Great descriptive passages throughout this entry painted vivid pictures in my minds eye. That's good writing!
I really enjoyed your story. It sounded like a good holiday and left me wanting to know if you finished lighter. Hard with all that delicious food. Just one suggested correction. This part: "... and watching the playful kitten tied up by the front door which leaps in the air to bat small buzzing mosquitoes." makes it sound as though the front door is leaping. It would read better this way:
"...and watching the playful kitten which is tied up by the front door and leaping in the air to bat small buzzing mosquitoes." (Just my opinion)
Loved your candid self-deprecation and the warmth of the story. I thought your last two paras were a great way to wrap it up.
Congratulations for ranking 8 in Masters and 12 overall!