The Official Writing Challenge
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Excellent job with tone and pace of this piece. I feel like I intimately know your MC - which is quite a feat with only 750 words. Very nicely done.
Very well written detailed essay on a complex MC. Though he did good deeds before dying, I wanted him to express some emotion, to himself or to someone else. But he was true to character right to the end. I think that is sadder than the fact that he died young.
The tone is so like I imagine a banker to use. And the story's matter-of-fact-ness" also seems so in character with a man who once was more concerned with things than people. Well done.