The Official Writing Challenge
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This article's details are tangible! I could feel the Insta-Bubble. (Cool!) Could hear the computers voice in my head. The story-line details-- very well placed. The twist at the end was amazing! Viola! Science Fiction from a Master...
This is great! sci-fi at it's best. I love the character of Shanee, her bravery especially, even though she had to go through all of that just to get something even more precious than she could've imagined. I can't think of much to improve this, except that maybe if there was more space, you could've expanded the ending a bit, using more descriptions, etc, to keep with the intensity of the story. Amazing. Loved it. especially the IB. Very good. ^_^
My kind of sci-fi! Great writing, and I enjoyed the read!
Heart-thumping suspense. I was sure that she'd get sprung. Makes me wonder where she hid the chip. Skillfully planned, skillfully executed and skillfully written.
Improve on this? Only if there's a higher word count!! :-) Wonderful!
This is a wonderful sci-fi story, one of the best this week, I think.
This is a great story that captured my interest from the start. Great job!
Very well written science fiction. Good job. Loved the message.