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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 - Advanced)
Topic: Prosperity (05/11/06)
THE POOR SHALL INHERIT

By: Harold and James Gram

Blest are the poor, the Bible says
Of that we are aware.
But they have found a thousand ways,
To live without a care.

The rich do have some stressful times,
To oversee their hoards.
Jesus warned their efforts could,
Detour their heaven bound roads.

We often forget the working stiffs,
Who struggle every day,
It’s weekly checks, not lotteries,
That constitute their pay.

They pay the landlord for his shacks,
Buy discount threads to wear,
Pay full price for little snacks,
Get drugs for healthy care.

There’s oil and gas and candles too,
And light and heat and fire,
There’s costs for life and food and fuel,
And tax when you expire.

The working person gets the shaft,
And never gets ahead,
He works each day from dawn to dusk.
And struggles till he’s dead.

But can there be prosperity,
With such a dismal view,
Of course there can, for we envy
What’s good for me and you.

Your treasurer is a stable life,
Job, family, home and so.
Some are more reckless, careless too,
With property and dough.




I guess when all is said and done,
Prosperity’s a state
Of mind. We gladly boast.
Of our own life and fate.

Let others judge, it does not help.
For what we oversee
Our lives, our joy in what we have
Creates our prosperity.
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Marilyn Schnepp 
05/22/06
This appears to be an entry by another person other than the one entering the Challenge contest. Hmmmm?
Jan Ackerson
05/22/06
A lovely message. Work a bit on consistent meter, which will help your poem to "flow" a bit better.
Dr. Sharon Schuetz
05/23/06
I enjoyed reading this take on prosperity.
Beth Muehlhausen
05/24/06
First, let me say I respect anyone who writes poetry since it is NOT MY THING. So you score automatically on that point. :-)

The title caught my eye; I wondered if I'd hear about what the poor would inherit, from God's point of view. (Perhaps living w/out a care, as in your first stanza.)

I had to wonder about the authorship...??

Just FYI, the choppiness of the next-to-last stanza threw me off - I sort of lost connection at that point.

Good, strong closing comment: "Our joy in what we have
Creates our prosperity."