The Official Writing Challenge
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This is a lovely story that really showcases the pain Jesus felt for us. Be careful about POV shifts (head-hopping). You started from the POV of Sarah to her father. FW offers a free book for Gold and Platinum members called, Bring Your Writing to Life. You have to email [email protected] and ask for it, but it's a great resource on POV shifts. Also double check the rules of punctuation in quotation marks. You pulled me in right from the beginning and held my attention to the end. You covered the topic in a great way and delivered a powerful message.
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06/19/25
I liked how you wove the theme of thorns and armor together.