The Official Writing Challenge
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This is an interesting story. You did a nice job of writing on topic. Take note of little things like donor vs donar. Add some body language to develop your characters more. I enjoyed your story and was pulled in right away. You have a clear message here. I also enjoyed that the child helped resolve the conflict. That's a great tip for a children's story and works in other genres too.


Also, if you're a member of our FW's group on Facebook and would like more comments on this week's challenge, pop over and leave a hint about your title in my Drop a Hint post in the group. If you're not a member, consider joining.