The Official Writing Challenge
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05/02/24
Thank you for sharing this story with us. Sadly, so many are hungry in this world. And in my own experience, those that are without food and furnishings are usually the most generous of all individuals.

Well written in content and delievery.

God Bless~
I enjoyed reading this piece. I can see the dignity in this little girl through the way you described her. I can also sense an element of surprise or almost "shock" in the person who interacted with her. Perhaps, conviction is what I saw. I personally feel it is convicting to realize that this "dignity" is so within this little girl in spite of her circumstances. It is almost impossible not to be impacted by her gentleness and selflessness, which seems to make my heart (as a reader) want to do better or be better.
This is a powerful piece. It really touched my heart and is so relevant in the world today. Try using more body language to make the story ppop more. Often when people can't understand one another, they use hand gestures and facial expressions to communicate. Even the beginning would introduce conflict if you described what she looked like instead of just telling. You did an excellent job of writing on topic without using the topic word. It has a clear message and will touch the hearts of many.