The Official Writing Challenge
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09/16/22
I think your story would make a good long story. The plot and characters are good. I like the way the victim evangelized to her kidnapper. It was fun to read.
This is a great idea. It has a great conflict and pulls the reader in right away. It needs descriptions of people and body language rather than all dialog. You also need to learn quotation rules to help the reader figure out who is speaking. If it's the same person no end quotes at end of paragraph, just beginning ones at the start of each paragraph. The dialog needs to feel a bit more realistic too. Someone abducted would be talking in quick incomplete sentences. Thoughts can be put in italics not quotation marks too to help the reader understand what's going on. Likewise thoughts aren't neat complete, sentences. You do a great job of bring Scripture into the piece and it's a great fit. The resolution comes a bit fast, but under the word limits, you did a nice job resolving it. You have a clear, Christian message. I could see some great potential for a longer piece. I really enjoyed it.
09/21/22
This is powerful writing, nicely done, and put together in such an interesting way.
God Bless~
09/22/22
Congrats,
God Bless~