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04/15/22


This is a good analysis of the scripture. However, you have repeated the topic [Heir/Heiress] nine [9] times which FW.com guidelines advise against unless they have changed recently? Please, check this out.
This is definitely on topic. I really enjoyed reading it. I liked that you took a slightly different take on it. I didn't remember that story in the Bible and enjoyed that you brought it up. It's a relevant topic, especially in today's world. Although I often say some of the best on-topic stories never use the topic word, sometimes they are needed. I don't think it's necessarily wrong to use the word too often, but sometimes using a synonym (successor, descendant, scion) can break it up some. Another thing that can help sometimes too is tightening it up so you don't repeat yourself. Overall, though, I thought you did a fine job and produced an enjoyable read. You have a great message, you used Bible verses to make your point, and you held my interest from the beginning to the end.