The Official Writing Challenge
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10/11/19
Vivid account here of gossip in action. I could here this told in a voice of a girl who doesn't take a breath! Whew! I know lots of people who talk that way and it's exhausting to be around.
10/11/19
Well done!

Blessings~
10/11/19
You have great material here. However, I feel if you had set the stage with the girls trading barbs via actual dialog it would have reached a new level of polish. Showing, not telling is an essential rule in keeping the reader engaged. Otherwise, I did enjoy the read, very much!
This is a great start. You really pulled me in. I wish I knew who was speaking and to whom. Also by adding body language, thoughts, and dialog, you really add a punch. You've got a great foundation though. Your pacing is spot on and left me a bit breathless too. Keep writing. You've an awesome start and I'm eager to read more of your stories.
10/17/19
That's why gossip is so entertaining! Great job and right on target. Enjoyable read.