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Super!! You had just the right amount of sarcasm to make it entertaining without becoming whiny and negative. A story everyone has experienced. Your closing was perfect.
06/07/18
Good job with the story development and the honesty in laying out the struggles.
06/11/18
A stretch topic-wise, but I really liked the story. Well written.
I really liked your honestly in telling us what the family holiday was really like. I'm sure we've all had those kinds of trips where things didn't quite turn out the way we planned. The scripture you mentioned is one of my favourites, and you gave a good example of how to apply it. You could have perhaps tied the story in to this week's theme a little more clearly, but I did find it entertaining.
Oh the memories - but it's all the dirt in looking for that gold that actually causes the bonding - Rained out camping trips - etc
Cheers - great read!
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