The Official Writing Challenge
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05/08/14
You have such a unique style of story telling. Well done, and entertaining as always.

God bless~
05/10/14
Loved your story. It flowed well and kept me wanting more.
05/10/14
What a brilliant piece! So clever and well written. I have just one suggestion. You wrote: "Fear as a motivator was the Father Below’s primary motivator for his minions, and it worked well." It's a bit awkward. Maybe: The Father Below used fear as a primary motivator for his minions, and it worked well. Just a suggestion. You have such a gift for storytelling!
I felt a delightful touch of C. S. Lewis here. Quite a story and quite the diversionary tactic!
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