The Official Writing Challenge
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06/09/07
There are a couple good messages for children in this story--knowing the importance of calling 911 in emergencies and being able to clearly tell your address and also that younger siblings aren't always a bother, but can be a joy!

I noticed you called the MC Alicia at the beginning of the story and Allison futher down. "Allie" works as a nickname for them both! :)

Nice job!

Well done. I like the little drama and the relationship forming between sister and baby brother. God bless.Janice
06/11/07
Love the messages, nicely tucked in like little surprises. Great writing!
This is a great story. Well done