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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 - Advanced)
Topic: Friendship (04/04/05)
A TREATISE ON FRIENDSHIP

‘The heart of man is awakened … by God to bonding,’ I heard a shepherd say.

‘Warmth filled my being. I shone with love. Glory of joy be-sought me!’

- Yes, the ember to union is of pristine origin. It’s clothed with golden laurels, the power to call insight into mutual awareness … ah, to purposed union!

Man, thus, is called by natural inclination towards timidities of loving, assured of reap in this hallowed meekness. Upon the moment of the warm realization, the sun glows within. Its rays spread out, embracing to depths of humanism. The bind spells depths ineffable, lightfully shinning with open gestures, which mature the holy, - the meaning being in God!

Ah! let eyes amuse themselves with the generosity steeped in the manly kindly deeds; - pre-supposition will illumine thought to an welfare realms, quite un-bordered, flowing with regards in sharing. In them being is unconfined … swims in free full veins, stroking out hearts to the rareness that is love.

And as we walk these leas, humility fires itself into the ability. Men unite freely, according each the affable. - Brotherhood springs amidst, affirming the Eternal’s desire towards confirmed filial living.

See! - the simplicity of the word friendship is the sum urge towards blissful goodness, for all, in the saintly chronicles of every Faith.

AMEN.
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Delores Baber
04/13/05
Communication requires 3 things. The sender, the message, and the receiver. If the sender overestimates the ability of the receiver to comprehend the message there is a problem. The thing that troubles me is that your work might be a masterpiece, but beyond my cognitive ability to comprehend. I apologize for my lack of comprehension.
Phyllis Inniss 
04/14/05
Your examination of the subject of friendship is probably a good one but I would have been happier if you could have simplified it.
David Ian
04/15/05
I like where it's going, I'm not sure it gets there. Mixed metaphors (clothing embers), noun/verb usage (assured of reap), and missing subjects to sentences turn many ideas into underdeveloped themes.

It's not quite poetry, where many of these might be forgiven, and thus as prose it must answer to a bit more structure (and attention to punctuation).
As pure exclamative expression it has merit, but this diamond in the rough needs a bit more shaping. Thanks for sharing.
Maxx .
04/16/05
This was interesting. It was poetic ... but not really. I liked the rythm. The message was ok ... I would have liked to see a little more development on that front.