The Official Writing Challenge
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03/07/06
The topic "enter" evidently is in the doorway...which is the "entrance" to the house. A nice job of writing.
03/08/06
The last line "His blood soaked the doorway" was great!
Enjoyed the the cultural exchange as well.
03/08/06
A truly wonderful piece of writing.
03/10/06
This one gave me shivers. Wow.
03/10/06
I appreciated the inability of your narrator to speak... but having the ability to 'see,' to see Christ, the true Sacrificial Lamb!

This is profound... the VERY CLEAR message given of the already arrived Messiah, but missed by so many devout Jews. I have the same response when we do our own Passover every year... the message is all there... Doesn't anyone else see it?

Haunting... brilliant.
03/10/06
I've thought about the connection to the sacrificial lamb at Passover, but I've never thought about the doorway...I think that there is a lot to be learned about Jesus through Jewish feasts. The story seemed quick at the end, but the point was well received. Thanks for sharing!
03/10/06
Really good entry. I was sucked right in. You made me feel for the main charactor- had me seeing through his eyes, hearing with his ears. Great stuff.
03/11/06
Strong entry .. .maybe even a contender. You've done a great work here.
03/11/06
Perfect timing dear Ben! And perfect everything else. Chills, tears and thankfullness. A good one here! :)
This story was wonderfully done. I thought this one would place for sure. I loved the snippets of Hebrew. I thought they added to the overall authenticity of the piece and added a lot of strength to the story.

My heart broke as the narrator was excluded from the daily lessons by her father. This exemplified most pointedly how the tension of social change and cultural conflict went right into the hearts and homes of those living during Jesus' crucifixion. It should also be a great metaphor for those who believe in Jesus today who do not come from whole families of believers.

My only down point with this whole piece is that I was not satisfied with this little bit. I want the rest of the story. Please finish it.

Thank you.
Really enjoyed this travel into the home of a Jewish family, and I agree - the semantics of Hebrew added a lot to the authenticity. The way you told your story left me feeling hushed and still inside, as if in anticipation. While the end seemed abrupt, perhaps that is the best way to tell about the crucifixion. Just awesome!!!