The Official Writing Challenge
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09/12/21
Your entry will make a good Bible study.

However, be watchful as not to submit too soon. Your entry will read easier with a few more paragraphs and perhaps another edit.

Keep writing.
09/13/21
I agree with Sue's assessment this would be a good bible study. I especially liked your last paragraph.

Here's a little red ink. There was a spacing error and several punctuation errors concerning quotations, punctuation goes inside of the ' or "
Also in the case of an ellipsis- I believe a series of three is sufficient.