The Official Writing Challenge
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04/09/20
I liked the story. Pay attention to the punctuation so it's easier to read.
04/09/20
Must be an issue with the upload. Another story had missing punctuation, too. Sorry!
Same here, missing quotation marks and apostrophes. I like the way you ended about the way the place was envisioned. Fun title!
04/15/20
I liked how the hook and ending tie together. Quite creative. However, I found the hook hard to comprehend due to excess of detail in a run-on sentence. It could be shortened, or a well-placed period to break down a long sentence into two manageable ones.
04/15/20
Interesting story, and really detailed. Great message and powerful delivery.
Blessings~
04/16/20
Congrats!
Blessings~
This is a great piece. It's on topic in a fresh and intriguing way. It has an awesome message too. Congratulations on ranking 5th in your level and 19th overall. The highest rankings can be found on the message boards.