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06/12/17
This moved me very much. It doesn't say non-fiction, but this plays out every day throughout the world in war torn countries.

To me it started as if, well a fence was put up and we will have to tolerate it.

It was such a powerful story that I think a good hook setting the conflict would have helped.

This, of course, is my point of view.

It seemed to me that because your tone was that of a person that had endured such atrocities for such a length of time that it was just another daily event.

That tone made it more believable as a true event rather than a fictional story.

Well done. So sad. God bless you for writing it and those that in reality endure this on a daily bases.
06/14/17
This sober story could soon be the story of all of our nations who have turned their back on the One True God.

I see it as a sobering call for turning back before it is too late.

Well written reminder of the price of turning from the "One needful thing."