The Official Writing Challenge
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interesting story. two cautions about science fiction. first names. take care with building names so that they are fairly easily pronounceable, including items and materials. second, everything must make sense. for example, raising shields would not give more power to the engines. also, firing lasers in an enclosed space to wound would still leave laser bolts to do damage to the next thing in the line of fire. entertaining piece. i would be interested in reading what lead to the MC being locked up.
There's no question that you have a good imagination to write, but at one point I thought "Phew" was a character name. If you want to show "phew" as a sound either indicate it by saying the "laser made a "phew" sound. Or put it in italics, still indicating that this is a sound. Your content was confusing also but there is a talent here to write.